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Tuesday Tales 61 WINNER

Uncategorized | Posted by davidludwig
Oct 10 2012

Tuesday Tale Judging

I’m no good at promoting competitions, so I’m pretty happy with the turn out for this week with that in mind. We had some strong entries and several that were real pleasures to read. Since as part of my judging process I take notes on all of the entries, and as a writer I value feedback on my own work, I’m going to share my notes here on my site though I’m sure the official post over at Glitterword will be significantly abbreviated.

Judge’s Notes

Robin Abess (@Angelique_Rider) – Showtime – Something about the word “pitchman” really satisfies me, it says so much about the character and the scene in very little space. Definitely got a grim smile from me at the end. Darned pitchmen.

Rebekah Postupak (@Postupak) – Another excellent hook, you had me smiling and hungry for more in the first sentence of self appraisal. A great cautionary tale, but I’m not entirely sure I understood what happened. My impression, which I’m mostly sure is right, is that the dragon was turned into a human retaining only the draconic tail. Loved your dragon either way.

Ryan Strohman (@rastrohman) – Definitely got a hardboiled detective vibe from your 100 words, with the narrator who knows better and gets in trouble anyway. I like the attention to the shoes and the fact that you incorporated the secret word into the whole concept of the piece rather than just a throw away sentence. Unfortunately something about this piece doesn’t pop for me, and I can’t figure out what.

RRKovar (@rrkovar) – Crossroads – Great voice on your characters, and definitely a sweet way for a witch to get info as long as he does in fact manage to hang on to his soul. You have me curious about the larger story this snippet comes from. For consistency I would have appreciated more alliteration from the demon though, and there may be some grammatical trouble in the first line? I’m not great with grammar myself, but ‘Demon tongue twisted like her tattoo vines.’ doesn’t quite make sense to me.

Lisa McCourt Hollar (@jezri1) – Blind Date – Great immersion in the moment, and coming from you I was expecting some extraordinary twist by the end, and I actually think I was  a little disappointed not to get it. The word count is extremely limiting, but I still feel there could have been more of a story or point to this one. As is I felt like this would be excellent characterization for a longer piece.

Karen Valenzuela (@VictoriaNoir89) – The Cellist – Great period assassination. The disconnect of never getting any names or motives in connection with the murder is highlighted by using The Cellist as your title, first words and protagonist. It really makes me want to know more, which keeps the story in my mind long after I’ve finished reading as well as coming back to comb for additional clues… Though, I don’t think you used either of the prompts, so I think that’s a disqualification…

Nick Johns (@nickjohns999) – Mr Dark’s Designs – Egh, very visceral beginning. Something about bloody finger nails really hits me, so that’s a strong hook. You follow up with great sensory details like the ‘sewer sweat reek’. Really intrigued by the whole setup of paltering away curse marks onto others… It’s fascinating and compelling. Great entry, and very tempting for an honorable mention, but I think I’m deducting a few points for the Wednesday submission.

Honorable Mention

Alissa (@lissajean7) – I love how you started at the bottom of the picture, the shoes, and worked your way up to the art. Can totally buy the character who would rather be barefoot, and you present both the fancy shoe and art scenes in ways that I can strongly relate to. Bonus points for using more than one of the definitions.
Your attention to details and double usage of palter are what snagged you the honorable mention.

 

Winner

Rakel’ Sampson (@SampsonWriter) – Ooo, very nice! Your first sentence hooked me perfectly, I had to know more about whether she would live up to or defy the picture she presented—and what a pretty package for Vengeance! Whether super-hero or fantasy, this is absolutely in my genre, and is a completely told tale in merely 100 words.
You’re the clear winner in my book for such an elegantly constructed piece that fully incorporates both prompts and within the limited word count hit so many of the right buttons for my personal tastes.

*-Winning Entry-*

She looked the picture of innocence; blonde curls and open green eyes. Then his eyes trailed downward, lighting on the artwork of vines and flowers adorning her legs. What a mystery, he thought as they ate dinner.
On the dark walk home he made his move. Before he got a good grip on her thigh, something grabbed his wrist.
“Careful. The more you struggle the tighter my vines get,” she hissed.
“Easy. I wasn’t going hurt you,” he paltered. Then his eyes widened as the tendrils reached his neck. “What are you?” he choked out.
She leaned in close. “Vengeance.”

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So get onto Twitter, Google, Facebook or whatever you use and spread the good news of winner @SampsonWriter and honorable mention @lissajean7 for all to know their glory.

You can read the other entries at http://glitterword.wordpress.com/2012/10/09/tuesdaytales-61-palter/

California

Uncategorized | Posted by davidludwig
Jun 10 2011

Andrew level 21 continued is now up and accessible via the Pages navigation to the right below the Polls, or via the Niar Saga main story page to the right or above. If you’re new to the site I encourage you to start from the Niar Saga main story-page as the story is laid out in order there with the character and setting information at the end.

Otherwise I’m making this post from California and expect to have the site undergo some significant changes soon including the long overdue site update, the appearance of my Twitter feed and yes even contact information on the About Page! Of course being out of state at the moment I’m quite busy and can’t say more just now.

Leopards, Little Girls and Drawing

Uncategorized | Posted by davidludwig
May 27 2011

Vixie level 19 continued is now up and accessible from the Pages navigation–below the polls to the right–or the Niar Saga main story page–above or to the right. We’ve come pretty far with this, huh? Can anyone else see the end in sight? If you can then perhaps you’ll understand the importance of getting some votes in on the current poll for what comes next. Even if you can’t you might take my word for it that it’s not a bad time to think about what should follow Niar Saga.

Notice today was another nice and early post. This one wasn’t because of an art buffer, sadly I still need one of those, but rather because I got up very early today. Lots to do including picking my aunt up from the airport for Memorial Day Weekend and about a dozen little things I’d like to get done on top of that. Perhaps the least important being taking advantage of the awesome Experience, Renown and Loot bonus going on in Dungeons & Dragons Online for this weekend.

In other news, I’m on Twitter now! The link is on the About Page under my Facebook and Deviant Art links. Once I get some technical aspects sorted out my “Tweets” will display at the bottom of the right hand column here on by.davidaludwig.com but until that happens those of you already on or willing to get on Twitter can follow me there to get my amusing anecdotes and trivial status updates on topics ranging from life to alcohol–last night’s rum-milk was good.

Mondays on the Edge!

Uncategorized | Posted by davidludwig
May 16 2011

Sheya level 18 is now up and accessible via the Pages Navigation (in the right hand bar below the Polls) or from the Niar Saga main story page (above or under Pages). I’d been really happy with getting this one done on time and with art that I liked and everything, then I realized I didn’t have a portrait for the beginning of the post of Sheya’s current armor that she got from the dwarves!

So I’ll get that one done before Friday’s post and swap it out in today’s too once it’s ready. Ultimately I think it’s a rather small problem, so I don’t think it’s urgent in terms of needing to be fixed. The advantage of the web-format, I think, is the option to retcon old material. Honestly I don’t want to rely on retconning, because in a way I think it cheats the people who follow from the beginning instead of coming in at the end, but for little things like character identifiers at the beginning of posts I don’t think it hurts anything. Also who knows how many people will even see the wrong character portrait on Sheya Level 18? Maybe I’ll have it fixed before anyone even looks at it. Then this post will be the only evidence that I ever made the mistake.

I mentioned it on Twitter the other day, but something else I’ve noticed is that I really need to start carrying a notebook and pencil around with me everywhere. I used to do it, but fell out of the habit at some point. Well now it seems I should get back in the habit so I can jot down ideas and observations like I used to. Just a generally good habit for a writer, you know?